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What You Want To Hear

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If he cared he would have called,
And not left you broken against a wall;
If he cared he would have knocked,
A hundred times before you unlocked;
If he cared he would have heard,
The invitation behind your words;
Cold shoulders and steel, he'd have ignored
And walked right up to your painted door.

But -

If you cared you would have seen,
In his face the lines between;
The tremble in his grand facade,
When full stops became question marks;
If you cared you would have known.
He put everything that he had to show,
On the table for you to inspect,
Despite his distrustful intellect.

If you cared you would have found,
His effort to please took much more ground,
And your hopes of him would always outweigh,
Your own pains to keep true love at bay.
If you cared, even a little bit,
You would put aside sharp wit -
For lost lovers mean more than wars,
You'd walk right up to his front door.
A short one about the being the first to apologise instead of waiting for the other person. Feedback would be much appreciated! :)
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thegirlfromindonesia's avatar
Love how you began with "if he cared" and ended with "if you cared." Sometimes we have to make the first move. :)

I really like the rhyme and the words you used in the poem. I also like how you separated the "but" from the stanzas - I think it intensifies it. Awesome poem! :D :thumbsup: :la: